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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggestion least one possible solution.

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It is true that
exponencialy
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exponentially
 increasing
world
population
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 more harm to the whole
world
, without any discrimination to both developed and
under developed
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underdeveloped
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 countries. There are many challenges due to
this
 problem, which are common to all,
such
 as depletion of
resources
 and lack of food and shelter are few of them
This
 essay will discuss those problems and possible remedies. Increasing
world
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population
 indefinitely leads to the faster depletion of natural
resources
 like water and forest. These
resources
 are already
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 the verge of disappearance. Many countries are already affected
with
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 climate changes,
deforestration
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deforestation
, water pollution due to their overpopulation. On top
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,
increasing
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number
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the number
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 of people
with in
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within
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 the limited space will lead to
further
 depletion and disaster.
Country
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 like Brazil is a good example
for
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of
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over
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overpopulation
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population
 issues.
Eventhough
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Even though
 they have
much
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many
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 natural
resources
 they are still suffering
with
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from
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 malnutrition, lack of drinking water and housing problems.
Adovacting
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 and imposing
a
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proper contraception is the only effective way to address the above
obstrucles
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obstacles
. Governments and other organization should focus on increasing the
acceptence
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acceptance
 of proper contraception methods among the public.
In
addition
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 there should be a mechanism to increase the
awarness
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awareness
 of
this
 problem among young couples, which can be done through schools and
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media
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medias
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 effectively. China has done
this
succesfully
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successfully
throuh
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through
the
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strict law. By limiting the number of children to two for a couple, China could
reached
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 many of the economic targets and ultimately became a
world
 power. In conclusion,
ever growing
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world
population
 has many disadvantages to the current
world
.
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 and imposing
an
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ideal contraception is the only effective solution that could
adrress
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address
 the issues like shrinkage of natural
resources
 and
deforestartion
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deforestation
 which are caused by
over
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overpopulation
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population
.
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