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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for poor, undeveloped countries, but also for industrialized and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggestion least one possible solution.

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Exponentially increasing
world
population
 is causing more harm to the entire
world
, with no discrimination to both developed and underdeveloped countries. There are many challenges because of
this
 problem, which is common to all,
such
 as depletion of
resources
 and lack of food and shelter are a few of them.
This
 essay will discuss these problems and remedies. Increasing the
world
population
 indefinitely leads to the faster depletion of natural
resources
 like water and forest. These
resources
 are already on the verge of disappearance. Many countries are already affected by climate change, deforestation, and water pollution.
Because of the
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 uncontrolled human
population
 and their activities within the limited space will lead to
further
 aggravate the problem of depletion of the
resources
. A country like Brazil is a good example of overpopulation issues. Even though they have many natural
resources
, they are still suffering from malnutrition, lack of drinking water and housing problems because of their current large
population
. Advocating and imposing proper contraception is the only effective way to address the above obstacles. Governments and other organisation should focus on increasing the acceptance of proper contraception methods among the public.
In addition
, there should be a mechanism to increase the awareness of
this
 problem among young couples, which can be done through schools and media effectively. China has done
this
 successfully through strict law. By limiting the number of children to two for a couple, China could reach many of the economic targets and ultimately became a
world
 power. In conclusion, the ever-growing
world
population
 has many disadvantages to the current
world
. Promoting and imposing ideal contraception is the only effective solution that could address the issues like shrinkage of natural
resources
 and deforestation, which are caused by overpopulation.
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