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The government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatment facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #companies #waste #materials #treatment #facility #environment
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Sale
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The sale
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 of a
product
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 is the final and most important function in a business enterprise. It involves
in
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the inflow of cash to the
company
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.
Increase
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An increase
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 in
sales
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 signifies the acceptability of the
product
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 of the
company
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. It
also
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 states how the
company
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 will survive in the dynamic business environment in the long run.
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,
companies
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 use
different
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a different
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 variety of
methods
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 to improve
the
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apply
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sales
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. There are different
methods
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 of marketing
of
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the
product
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 which eventually increases the
sale
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 of the
product
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. Since the market has shifted from producer oriented to
consumer oriented
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consumer-oriented
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. The products are manufactured according to the needs of the consumers.
Companies
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tries
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 their best to make the people aware
about
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of
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 the products they supply. There are various modes of selling opted by the
companies
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.
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 , Advertisements, Celebrity Marketing, publicities, posters or hoardings etc. Out of all the
methods
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, Celebrity marketing has proven to be the most successful to increase the
sale
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 figures. In the research conducted by ‘ The Economic Times ‘ , it has clearly stated that
companies
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 choosing celebrity marketing technique had reported the increase of 150 % of the
sales
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 in
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 3 years which is huge in comparison to
companies
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 opting other
methods
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.
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company
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 hired
the
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Deepika Padukone and Ranveer Singh for the advertisement of their air-conditioners, which later on saw
the
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 huge jump in the
sale
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 figures. In conclusion, we can say that selling is the ultimate and one of the most significant
part
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parts
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among
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of
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 all the other business function and it has to be carried out efficiently. Improvement in
sales
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 helps the
company
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 to stand out among the competitors and
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 helps in building the brand image.
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, whichever the method of selling is opted by the
companies
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, they must make sure that it is directed towards building
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 good image of the
company
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 and must be towards serving the consumer’s need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • toxic waste materials
  • waste treatment facility
  • sustainable business practices
  • environmental protection
  • economic impact
  • stringent regulations
  • government intervention
  • environmental outcomes
  • ethical responsibility
  • enforcing responsibilities
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