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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #students #classroom #home
There is no doubt that these days the importance of studying in the classroom with other
students
.In
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this
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students
 more efficient, I agree with those who
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the
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studying with
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others is more efficient. In terms of reason , the most significant reason
that is
 studying with other
students
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 a good chance to discuss some point that may not understand well and create a chance
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 every student to participate
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 the discussion to explain some lectures they ,not understanding.
Besides
 that , there is no
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disruption
 by phone and other technology that make them less concentrated.
However
 , some people think there is a con in studying in a group of student in the classroom.
Firstly
 , the most substantial drawback is on the pandemic so learning online at the house is important to
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 many lives.
Thus
 , for some of the
students
 who suffer from respiratory
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 there is a high threaten on their lives and their family to be infected .
Secondly
, the
students
 become more accessible
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 the lectures every time they want .
In addition
 to that , some of the family who not has funds enough to involve their children in the school. In conclusion , some of the family prefer their children or even that adult to study in the classroom with other
students
.
Therefore
 , there some aspect situation that I mentioned . I believe that the prons are overcome the crons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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