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In the last 20 years, the assessment of students has undergone major transformation. Many educational institutions no longer use formal examination as a means of assessment as they believe formal examination results are an unfair indication of a student’s ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 via formal
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 has been deeply rooted in the world but in some
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countries
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 the concept has been changed and it is believed that
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 of checking
students
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 is unfair.
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student’s
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ability
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 with formal
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 is not fair.
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student’s
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 the reasons that
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 way of checking
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 will just create anxiety and
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 will have very low self-esteem.
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 20 years.
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 number of education’s board believes that taking formal exams and asking
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 to sit in an exam hall just makes
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 fearful which results in poor academic and impact
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 mental health.
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, many developing
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 like Nepal still follow the pattern of formal
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 believing that country will have highly qualified intelligent people. But every year there has been a case that 70%
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 fail in those formal exams.
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 resulted in
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 having really low self-esteem.
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research comparing two
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 where one follows the formal
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 pattern and
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other
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 assess their
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 differently. It is showed that
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 those
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 who are examined via different assessment have got high
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 and have done really good with their life. Where
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 who
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 examined formally once in a year has
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 which resulted in
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 of motivation in their life. In conclusion,
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student
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 with formal
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 and pressurizing them, if all education institutions follow the pattern of accessing their
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 via different assessment, they will have
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 number of qualified and intelligent people in their
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