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Nowadays, it is more convenient and easier for people to travel to other countries. Is this a positive or negative development?

#people #travel #countries #development
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In these times it is much more flexible and easy for
people
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 to
travel
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 within
countries
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. There are myriad
of
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pros and cons when it comes to travelling around the world,which
have
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differant
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different
 impacts
to
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 the global platform. Globalization has been instrumental in motivating
people
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 to
travel
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 to other
countries
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 which have
number
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a number
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 of advantages.
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 with,
this
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give
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people
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 the chance to go and visit other
countries
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 and learn
their
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 culture, heritage which can be beneficial to improve their knowledge, and ultimately
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 would lead to
proper
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 understanding of other ethnic groups without having any misconceptions.
Secodnly
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, Global tourism is one of the biggest
contributers
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contributors
 to the economic stability of a country which means more
people
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traveling
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travelling
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 will help to improve developing
countries
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 effectively. As an example, Sri Lanka which is one of the
countries
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 in
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asia
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depends
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 1/3 of their
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 base on tourism which will help them
accordingly
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.
On the contrary
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,
traveling
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 with ease possess a number of threats to the
countires
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countries
 as well.
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, it has been instrumental in promoting and distributing drugs around the world.
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, it is found that 30
percent
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 of the global drugs are been sent through ordinary
passangers
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passengers
 who
travel
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 for leisure among
countries
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.
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, terrorist organizations use
this
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 as a tool to send their devoters to
countries
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 to carry out attacks which can harm the peace and stability of the society.
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, uncontrollable
travel
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 will have adverse effects
to
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 governments if not thought carefully. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
 there are
variety
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 of positive impacts because of convenient travelling around the world,
countries
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 should put in place proper measures to avoid unfortunate global threats which can cripple
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society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advancements in transportation
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Economic reasons
  • Globalization
  • Educational opportunities
  • Digital nomadism
  • Healthcare tourism
  • Tourism industry growth
  • Personal development
  • Interconnectedness
  • Higher living standards
  • Remote work
  • Broaden their horizons
  • Affordable travel
  • Medical treatments
  • Global perspective
  • Air travel options
  • Cuisines
  • Lifestyles
  • Job opportunities
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