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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Recently, customers buy from malls and deserted small shops, which led to their closure.
This
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 trend is a negative development because it ruins the
economy
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 on more than one
level
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.
Firstly
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, the trend is hurting the
economy
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 on the individuals'
level
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. Namely, when small shops lose their clients they bankrupt. small shop owners are individuals who support their
families
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;
hence
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, small
families
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 lose their source of income.
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, in Egypt, a small grocery store is usually owned by one or two persons, and they hire some extra staff to work in the shop along with their own children too. One grocery store can be the only source of income for multiple
families
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. Needless to say, large shopping centres are taking local shop owners out of business, and that has a fatal financial impact on a significant number of
families
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. A
second
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 negative effect is that
this
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 trend negatively affects the
economy
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 on the
state
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's
level
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. The
state
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 gets less tax because there are fewer contributors to the market.
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, the government faces an increasing number of unemployment; which creates multiple challenges and limitations on the overall
state
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's welfare. To illustrate, the government obliges to produce financial aid programmes to help the small private sector pushed out of the market while getting less financial resources
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 as taxes.
Therefore
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, any national
economy
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 will suffer if the local small private sector demolishes. To conclude, buying from large shopping malls
instead
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 of small local shops is a negative development.
That is
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 because it has negative outcomes on the individual's
level
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 by increasing unemployment and on the
state
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's
level
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 by crushing the national
economy
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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