Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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the causes of pressures and measures that can prevent them
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hand,
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have high expectations from their kids they want them to be excellent in every
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their
children
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the student themself.
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after
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they have to
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private coaching too.
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they have no time left to relax or to enjoy with their friend, or to think about
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parents
should and understand and relax and spend some quality time with their
children
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life and education
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about winning and competition . To
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in every aspect and
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about their future and what they really
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rather
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making our
children
compete with each other to be the best or to create the best out of them . we should take a step back and ask them to relax and think about the future and what would they want to be
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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