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Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 it is considered by few
people
 that recently constructed
houses
 should go after the
style
 of older
houses
 in village areas, there are some other
people
 who believe that everyone has their own rights to build
houses
 by their interest.
This
 essay will discuss both
statement
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 and an opinion will be shown in
conclusion
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the conclusion
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. On the one hand,
people
 who said to follow the old
style
 of construction tried to claim that it is better to have some traditional fashions in housing new ones. There are some reasons behind
this
 argument,
firstly
,
people
 who lived in the olden days looked seriously into the science of architecture and it has been some rational and values in the society .
Secondly
, it is better to build a house according to the weather condition and infrastructure of the particular area , which were clearly considered in
the
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ancient times.
On the other hand
, as per
some
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 it is the right of the person how to construct his house not by simply follow the previous model of housing. To them , nowadays
people
 like to go after
contemporary
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the contemporary
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style
 of building , it has more facility and easy to live on it.
Furthermore
, older fashioned
houses
 are difficult to handle especially in cleaning and arranging because of large spaces.
Thereore
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Therefore
 , it is not possible for the new generation households to take care of all the activities in their busy life. In conclusion, even though
minority
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 stated to follow
olden
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the olden
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style
 in newly built
houses
,
however
 , I believe it is the right and interest of the person who
own
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 the house to decide how to build it.
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