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As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages.

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The modern world has been drastically influenced by global internationalisation, which requires ubiquitous means of communication for nations from different countries and continents. While some people claim that
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 tendency suffocates local languages, others argue that we should strive to create a united society. In my point of view, a nation that neglects its mother tongue is doomed to fall into oblivion.
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 common area of debates is a
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 question, especially in multilingual countries. Post-soviet nations could be a great example here. According to the latest data provided by the
Ukrainian
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 Bureau of Statistics,
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-quarter of citizens speak only Russian,
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 -
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, while the majority relate themselves as bilingual.
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, the stunning correlation between the part of Ukraine a person lives in and the
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one
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 taught from mother was demonstrated. West was bound with Europe and was autonomous for a long time,
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 the
Ukrainian
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language
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 prevails here, while the
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 East had been under the control of
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 Empire before Ukraine became independent. As far as I am concerned, if Ukrainians forget the
Ukrainian
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language
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, the possibility of losing their independence will rock dramatically. Another factor to consider is the acceptance and acknowledgement of nation
language
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 by the world. To show an example, I would like to point out that all solid scientific researches made by Ukrainians will not be rewarded if
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 are not published in International journals.
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, scientists without knowledge of
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 of the international languages can not contribute to the world's progress. All in all, the generally accepted way of communication gives people the opportunity to express their ideas worldwide.
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, ignoring the native
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 makes the future of the country vague.
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