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There have been many inventions in human history, such as the wheel. Some people think the most important thing is the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Nowadays, it is hard to imagine a modern person without a smartphone in the palm or notebook in the bag. The truth is, people are so preoccupied with up-to-date technological achievements that not only do they ignore the importance of
such
 crucial
inventions
 as the wheel or antibiotics but
also
 take them for granted. In my opinion, the
Internet
 is one of a myriad of
inventions
 that made our lives more convenient.
Thus
, humanity has to remember all of them, because there is no future without the past.
To begin
 with, the World Wide Web (WWW) technology is a successor of previous core
inventions
,
such
 as arithmetics and electricity. Without doubts, the development of the
internet
 can not be attributed to one person. The long path of it started when Pifagor formulated his theorem and lasted for at least 1500 years.
Thus
, every breakthrough which has been made in science is a small piece of A modern puzzle which is called the
Internet
. Apart from that, other crucial
inventions
 can not be underestimated.
For example
, the discovery of the
first
 antibiotic by Alexander Fleming saved billions of lives /ai/, the invention of the internal combustion engine /i/ allowed people to move between cities and even countries, the development of the
first
 oil paints provided us with
such
 masterpieces as Da Vinci's “Mona Lisa” and Van Gogh’s /f/ “Sunflowers”. All in all, we can not deny the necessity of the
Internet
 today, ,
however
Add a comma
,however
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 the success of
further
 pursuit of digitalisation is impossible without learning from history.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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