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Band 7

You have recently moved to a different city for work, but you want to maintain contact with a friend from your previous workplace. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, •Describe the city you moved to • Tell him/her about your new job • Invite him/her to visit you You do NOT need to write any addresses

Dear Neelu, Hope you're doing awesome and everything's sunshine and rainbows on your side! Just wanted to fill you in on some exciting news that
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 got a new job in Calgary,
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 city is quite new to me, and I found that it's more peaceful than Brampton which is more crowded and congested.
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 the Brampton is a beautiful city, it cannot beat the Calgary's scenery. As you know,
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 have my education in Supply Chain Management and based on that I got hired for a dispatcher's position at Rover Carrier Ltd. The office staff is very nice, honest, and passionate about work. They're really helping me as I'm still new there. It's been a hot minute since we caught up with each other. Anyway, hit me up whenever you get a chance, and we'll make plans to catch up soon! Take care and see you soon! Suman

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Task Achievement
While your letter covers all the required points, try to include a bit more detail about the city and your job. For instance, mention specific activities you can do in Calgary or what excites you about your new role.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to maintain consistent capitalization, especially at the start of sentences and for proper nouns. This will enhance readability and professionalism.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your friendly tone effectively conveys a sense of familiarity, making the letter personable and engaging.
Task Achievement
You successfully conveyed your excitement about your new job and the city, which adds to the overall warmth of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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