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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Many
goverments
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governments
government
 claim that economic development is the most crucial target. On the other side, many people believe that other types of
progress
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 are as
benefitial
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beneficial
 as economic
progress
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 for the nation. I am going to discuss the
arguements
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arguments
 of both sides and give my
my
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honest opinion on that matter.
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, it is true to underline that indeed economic
progress
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 is extremely important for the prosperity of a
country
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. The better the economy, the better the quality of
life
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 of most citizens.
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, in
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economically
 developed countries, the unemployment rates are most of the time really low,
as a result
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, the percentage of the
citizents
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citizens
 that
stungle
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struggle
single
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 is really low.
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, in
economic
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 prosperous countries, the
avarage
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average
 salary of the
emplyees
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employees
 tends to be higher than the other less developed countries,
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those
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emplyess
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employees
 can be more financially capable to
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entertain
amd
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and
 amuse themselves and their families. On the other side of the
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 there are people who believe that other types of
progress
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 are equally important for the
country
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. The type of
progress
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 they mean most of the time when they say
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 Social
progress
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. Social
progress
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 is
also
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 really crucial for the well being of the
country
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 since it improves not only the public order and the relationships between the inhabitants of the
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,
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 but
also
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 their mental health.
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, social
progress
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 helps
on
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 tackling social issues and inequalities like xenophobia, patriarchy and bullying. By terminating those issues the
life
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 of many
citizents
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citizens
 gets better. In conclusion, both Social and Economic Development are exceedingly important for the
country
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, since both of them help on creating a better
life
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 for their people
through
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 making their
life
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 easier and free of unnecessary obstacles.
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goverments
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governments
government
 should pay equal attention
on
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 developing them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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