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The government should pay for the course fees for everyone who wants to study at university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #course #fees #study #university
It is often argued that tuition
fees
 should be financed by the
government
 to the
students
 who aspire to take
education
 at university. Even though I agree that the
government
 should invest in other subjects, I do believe that proper funding of tuition
fees
 by the
government
 is crucial for the
students
. On the one hand, the
government
 should definitely allocate a huge part of its budget on educational costs because paying
education
 expenditure is a significant part of
social
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government
 structure. The majority of
students
 do not possess enough money, and thereby do not afford to take
education
 at any university or college.
This
 support triggered by the
government
 provides an advantage for
students
, enrolling with a degree course and graduating with
a
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great success from the university, during their academic and social life. Take some countries, which have been supporting a lot of enthusiastic
students
 for so long, as a clear example; had the
students
 not been supported by the
government
, the number of educated people would not have increased.
On the other hand
, the
government
 should spend money on other needs because
families
 could afford their children's higher
education
.
Furthermore
, by working a lot of
students
 at any occupation, they might fund themselves.
This
 provides advance for both
families
 and the
government
. Not only
this
do
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 not belong to responsible
families
 and the
government
, but
also
students
 are responsible for tuition
fees
.
This
 helps avoidance of financial burden for both
families
 and
government
 as well as experience for
students
.
Thus
, the
government
 should finance other needs rather than course
fees
. To
main
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 conclusion to be drawn, I agree that the
government
 should allocate a large part of its budget to other needs of the society;
however
, I strongly believe that course
fees
 should be financed by the
government
 since it plays an important role for
students
.
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