Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

Increasing the
crime
rate
is one of the most difficult issues facing
by
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all governments and security organizations across the world. Many people believe putting offenders behind the bars is the best approach to reduce
the
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crime
rates.
However
, I disagree with
this
view and in my
point
of view providing better
education
and employment assistance is the best approach to reduce the
crime
rate
. I know
this
is a debatable topic and I will explain why I reach
to
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my conclusion in the following essay.
Education
plays a vital role in building a safe and healthy society. Most of the
education
curriculums are developed to increase
values
like moral,
importance
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about
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following the law, social and cultural
values
in addition
to academic progress. Once you learn these
values
during the school days these ideas will engrave
in to
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scholar’s
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brain and they will use these
values
throughout their life. Governments must arrange appropriate programs to make sure proper
education
is available in all age groups. One of the recent research results from UNICEF is underlining these facts because as per their assessment
crime
rate
is very high in uneducated societies comparing to
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educated
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. One scary
point
in the report, kids who quit school during their elementary
education
had a high tendency to join criminal and mafia gangs. Another important
point
to consider is the
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impact of prisons influence
in
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prisoners. Numerous people sentenced to
jail
return back as big criminals because they are influenced by born criminals living behind the bars. Another critical
point
our
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society is
mindset
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the mindset
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of people who are not ready to accept and accommodate if someone received
a
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punishment and sentenced to
jail
. So, when they get released from prison if
the
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society is not accepting them, they may automatically try to join some gangs. It is important to educate prisoners
some
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sort of job because
this
will be helpful for them to earn a job once they released after the punishment term. Based on the facts I furnished above I strongly agree to provide better
education
based on moral
values
to everyone
instead
of sending them to
jail
because
this
will definitely help to reduce the
crime
rate
. At the same time, I support harsh
jail
punishment for cruel crimes like killing, raping, etc.
Finally
,
government
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must try to increase
the
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employment opportunities due to the fact that unemployment is the highest cause of
crime
.
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