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The development of tourism contribute to english becoming the most prominent language in the world .some people think this will lead to english becoming the only language to be spoken globally. what are the advantages and disadvantages having one language in the world .

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 of every country .Due to
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 spoken globally . I
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 industry becoming popular .
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, it is easy when it comes to
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 came and they travel and communicate with each
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, local
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 needs and requirements . Many
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backbone
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 of every country so local
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.Many times
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 only
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speak English
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 do not understand .
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 the culture and tradition of the local
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 they think they should learn
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 pros are more than cons. To conclude, having
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 has its own benefits .but due to boosting the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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