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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some
people
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 that we can seek
an
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another solution to
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 with
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climate
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the climate
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change
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 phenomenon,
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 of preventing the variations of the
climate
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. In my point of view, I completely disagree with
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 and I believe that preventing
climate
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change
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 is the best
way
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. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that there can be another
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 to live without stopping
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climate
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change
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. One of the main reasons can be that global warming is the major source of
climate
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 variation, which means that it can increase the emissions of carbon dioxide in the air because of the reduction of vegetation life.
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, the amounts of fossil fuel
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 are burnt in the atmosphere can cause an enormous
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 in weather. Another reason can be that some humans are not aware of the deforestation issue that can lead to serious problems in the air.
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, some farmers clear a huge number of trees and plants around the world and cause the oxygen to be less , while cause carbon dioxide to be higher.
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, it is
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 possible to make the opposing case that there must be some methods that can be taken to tackle the problem of
climate
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change
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. The
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way
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 could be that
people
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 have to decrease the rate of global warming by planting more trees and plants.
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, the reforestation process could increase the emissions
oxygen
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of oxygen
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 gas in the air. The
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way
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 can be that
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 can use natural resources
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 of burning fossil fuels. A particularly good example here is that
people
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 can use natural and pure oil rather than burning coal and petroleum. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
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 condition, and I believe that the best
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 to prevent
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climate
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the climate
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change
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 phenomenon is
reducing
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by reducing
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 the global warming rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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