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Any recent Invention that you think proved beneficial or detrimental to society.

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In
this
 modern era there are many new invention by the human beings. In these days computers , mobile
phones
 and robots are making our life easy. These techonology changed our lifestyle in many aspects. In my opinion these changes are both positive and negative effects. I would like to mention the features of the mobile
phones
 in the following paragraph.
To begin
 with, mobile
phones
 provide us a new communication platform which changed our lives.
People
 can touch with each other any time with a single touch all over the world. They can do text, voice call and video call to their favourite ones.
For example
: In past time,
people
 used to visit their realatives but in
this
 modern time they do not need to go anywhere because now they can
use
 the phone to know about the them and
also
 easy to them see their dear ones faces more frequently. Moving
further
, the mobile
phones
 are very helpful in the daily life of
people
. We can save necessary data and keep it safe.
People
 can
use
 it for the entertainment pupose like they can see movies, playing games and
also
 reading the books.
Moreover
, in our daily life we can take help in setting alarms , remember important dates and
also
 track our health by some applicaions.
For example
: We have so many application in the mobile phone which we can
use
 to track or steps ,calculate the calories we take and
also
 calculate that how much consume.
On the other hand
, mobile phone have some adverse effects on the
people
 health. The continuing
use
 of the
phones
 is harmful for the eyes and mental health which can increse the medical problem.
Furthermore
,
people
 missuse the
phones
 which can effect the humanity and the society. To conclude, the inventions are making for
people
 benefits but it
also
 comes with their negative effects ,so its depend on the humans that they can
use
 it which way.
Submitted by Piyush on

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