Your local council has decided to close the only park in your town and build a car park in its place. You believe this will have a bad effect on the people who live and work in the town. Write a letter to the mayor. In your letter introduce yourself explain why you think the decision is wrong say what you think the council should do instead

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Gloria, I am one of the residents of York

Town

, residing in the

Park

Avenue apartment. I am writing to you to express my concern regarding the closure of Victoria

Park

in our

town

. As you are aware, Victoria

Park

is the only place in the city for inhabitants to relax and enjoy. Everyone irrespective of age visits the

park

on a daily basis to spend their leisure time in

this

beautiful

park

Furthermore

, parents could not ask for any other spot other than

this

park

for their children to have fun during the evenings.

Additionally

, there is a very good elderly community who comes to the

park

for a walk.

Thus

, considering all these aspects, I certainly believe that closing the

park

can have detrimental effects on the people in the

town

Nevertheless

, I completely understand the necessity of parking areas in

town

and I would like to give an alternative solution to mitigate

this

issue. Would you kindly enquire about the barren land north of Victoria

Park

which was originally purchased to build an apartment complex, but later, the plan was called off

due to

financial crisis. If we could arrange another area for a parking facility, it would be ideal because it satisfies the needs of all the citizens equally. Thanks for your co-operation! I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Gloria Mathew

Submitted by gloriasherin on Sat Jun 01 2024

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coherence cohesion

Although your letter is well-structured, ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea. For example, the second paragraph could be split into two for improved clarity.

task achievement

Good job providing a comprehensive response! Make sure to specify the location of the alternative parking area more explicitly for even better clarity.

task achievement

You have demonstrated a suitable and respectful writing tone throughout the letter.

coherence cohesion

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

6
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

235 words

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