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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The constant increase in public healthcare costs is causing many people to think that the population should finance their own medical care.
Nevertheless
, I strongly disagree with
this
 approach. Reasons to support
this
 will be stated in the
next
 paragraphs.
Firstly
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primary-care is a fundamental right and it must be ensured by each government regardless of the individual's age or economic status.
Accordingly
, the needy may not have sufficient resources to pay for these services neither now or in the future, but no matter the reasons why the person is economically disadvantaged, they should not be left to die.
For example
, elderly people who have been abandoned may not have the economic power to afford a nursing plan.
However
, the strict enforcement of healthcare regulations must provide
this
 service.
Therefore
, every person in the world should be able to be assisted by a professional if needed.
Secondly
, the lack of government's control over its economical resources is at the core of the problem.
For instance
, Corruption is a real issue
that is
 affecting the proper distribution of the country's wealth and thousands of millions are being abruptly disappearing which could be used to enhance the medical system.
Moreover
, the insane accumulation of fundings by a marginal group of people is inherently altering the possibility of financing worldwide public health care systems.
Hence
, unless governments provide a crystal-clear distribution of public fundings, free medicare will be quite difficult to afford. In a nutshell, Even though there are grounds to believe that in the upcoming days the population of a country should pay for health-care, I take the view that governments have to guarantee
this
 fundamental right to the entire society with an appropriate managing of public money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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