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Successful sports professionals earn a great deal more than people in other important professions.Some people think this is fully justified others think it is unfold. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the infield of sports, popular players get a big amount of
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 rather than those individuals who
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 in another essential occupation. A number of masses argue
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 completely fair with them, but others have an opposite opinion.
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 essay will substantiate my perspective and both views in the following paragraphs with appropriate examples. To commence with, incoming of sportsman are higher because they are famous in the world. Everyone knows them from their name and
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, they
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 represent their nation in other countries.
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, lots of children and youngster inspire by them and accept them as their ideal.
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, Virat Kohli is one of the highest-paid and famous cricketers in the India team, and he
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 contributes to won a number of World Cup for the India team under his captaincy.
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, my opine is that if someone achieves name and fame
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 it is obvious their
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 level goes up. On other hand,
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 who believe that everyone put equal effort into their
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 why their
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 package less compares to the sportsman.
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work
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 as like an engineer, doctor, pilot, police officer , teacher and that's all play a vital role in society and provide better service to them.
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, doctors who known as the
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 God on the earth and save
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's life from different types of diseases which are
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 one of crucial as well as responsible job, but their
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 not like players. I believe that in
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 modern era, popularity plays a great role in earning system
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 a number of engineers, heart surgeon, police commissioner receiving a vast amount of
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. To summarize,
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 depends on position, popularity and experiences I think if
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 are in high position or famous
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 they are desire to get a high
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 amount regarding their
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.
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, others
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 want fair
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 related to their job for appreciation.
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