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some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment.are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment.

#people #house #apartment
It is argued by some that living in an apartment is better than living in a private
house
. While there are advantages to living in a large and populated building, in my
opinion
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 the advantages of living in a
house
, namely privacy and
queit
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quiet
, outweigh its drawbacks. On the one hand, living in an apartment
next
 to other people can be helpful in various ways. In a building with several families, there is always a good chance that someone will be
avialble
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available
 to help, whether if it is with
baby-sitting
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 or with fixing an electricity problem.
For example
, I am currently living in a large building in the
center
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 of Tel-Aviv and when I cook dinner and find out that I am missing a certain product I can simply ask one of my friends
next
 door for help.
On the other hand
, living in a
house
 enables much more privacy.
This
 is simply because there are no apartments nearby and the chances of hearing someone from another
house
 is scarce.
For instance
, a large number of people from the private sector often need to work from home and living in a private
house
 is clearly an advantage for them, having a quiet and comfortable place to work from. In conclusion, there are advantages and drawbacks for both living in an apartment or in a
house
. I strongly
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that the sense of privacy is the most important factor in choosing the place where you live and
thus
 think that a
house
 is a better option out of the two.
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