As well as making money businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

Many different views relating to types of companies’ obligation are available. In my opinion, I strongly agree that earning more and more money is an important target for every business.
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, I
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believe that social responsibilities are one of
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that corporations should have. On the one hand, it is thought that generating profits plays
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significant role for each company.
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, if a company’s finance is likely to be adequate enough for covering its bills, it has to run into debts.
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, once broke out, the COVID-19 has made a terrific impact on the business activities;
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, the income of businesses has been reduced significantly making some of them go bankrupt
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affects the economy of countries.
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, when developing, the corporation can give many job opportunities for
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, which
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to reduce social evils.
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, while
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possession is
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necessary, companies still have to contribute
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responsibilities
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community
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.
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number of factories increase, the more serious the
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damage is.
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, VEDAN company is known as a culprit to make the river contaminate, so it needs to give some measures to solve
this
problem.
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, the businesses ought to build some constructions for society or praise a fund for poor or talented students. These activities not only help those people overcome their less fortunate condition, but they
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brand. To sum up, in spite of making profits is important for every company, I think that they
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practise their social obligation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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