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So,Almost everybody nowadays is found using personal vehicle for travelling purpose. What are the reasons of this increasing trend? Explain what negative outcomes may be faced in the society due to this.

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When I was a child, I remember, nearly 10 vehicles were there in my town.
However
, Nowadays, almost every person has their own vehicle
travel
 to.
This
 essay will discuss what are the
causes
 of raising
this
 trend and what are the negative effects that may be caused because of
this
. A past generation had much dependent on agriculture rather than other jobs, but at present, Technology has developed robustly and new opportunities have been created.
People
 have to
travel
 from one place to another place each day for their work purpose, so, obviously,
people
 would think to
travel
 in their own vehicle rather than choosing other transportation.
Moreover
, infrastructure was not developed in those days, when it started improving eventually the demand
also
 increased. The enormous increase in transportation creates several environmental issues.The noise which is coming from the vehicles would cause noise pollution, it creates, so much disturbance to those who live beside the roads and the air which comes out from the vehicles
causes
 air contamination that would affect
people
 health,
causes
 severe breathing problems.
In addition
 to
this
, while they are riding, if they might hit another vehicle or they drive recklessly
then
 he/she has to face severe wounds, sometimes, it
causes
 death as well. In conclusion,
People
 would habituate to
travel
 when they need only, as old
people
 would like to walk rather than
travel
, and when they are driving don't forget to take necessary measures like if they are travelling on a bike, wear a helmet,
similarly
, seatbelt while your driving car.
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