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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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 has become a huge part of our life and we live with it
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. It has definitely changed our
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, which can cause some drawbacks. The following paragraphs will discuss those disadvantages of the
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 and what method can we use in order to solve
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. Nowadays, there are a large number of students and adults who are addicted to the
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, they spend eight and more hours surfing the
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, which causes most of them to have a sedentary lifestyle. They do a lack of exercise,
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 of obesity. As I mentioned, their screen time is more than it should be,
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, it causes them to have
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bad
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. Eventually, the thickness of their spectacle lens is gradually getting thicker. As we know,
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addiction
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 the
internet
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 can cause various devastating problems to us and our life. But there are still some solutions which can prevent us from being addicted to the
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.
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, you can try to block some websites that you used to visit, as it really can distract you from your daily routine.
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, when you are doing homework and it should be done by that day, you should be responsible for it,
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 of watching youtube videos.
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 why sometimes blocking youtube may be a good idea for you. In conclusion, even though the
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 is still necessary for us, addiction is still one of the main problems that the
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 created. There are always methods to solve addiction, which can be quite useful as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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