In the modern world, the rate of pollution is increasing.It is suggested that, ownership of cars should be restricted to one per family to reduce air pollution and traffic congestion. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the boost in the
pollution
on earth,there is an upsurge in the use of private
vehicles
.It is
advice
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that to control
air
pollution
and traffic jam the only one car per family should be allowed.I completely disagree
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more
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a solution. To embark with , the suggestions to support my ideology,
firstly
,
such
restriction will not only force people to compromise on their standard of living but
also
may lead to increase consumption of fuel, keeping the problem of
air
pollution
intact
instead
,
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should promote public transport -buses- and railway - by bringing more innovation , frequency , punctuality and quality as a
by - product
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, there will be economic growth.
secondly
, by encouraging the carpool and odd-even driving method there will be a solution to both
air
pollution
and traffic congestion .
Additionally
, wider roads, over bridges ,underpass and
multi -storey
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parking will redress.The woe of road blockage due to excessive use of
vehicles
. Considering, proactive measures to reverse
air
pollution
,
first
and foremost, alternatives to fossil fuel should be researched upon .
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electric hydro , solar and bio-diesel operated
auto mobiles
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will aid to bring a change simultaneously ,
initatives
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initiatives
like reforestation and regular health
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of
vehicles
will
also
serve the cause. on the close scrutiny ,
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conclude that it is not an efficient way to restrict
vehicles
as
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might better health to curb
air
pollution
and traffic congestion .
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