Many people believe children should begin learning a foreign language as soon as they start school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a belief around us that
children
should start learning a different
language
at
initial
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the initial

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stage of schooling. According to
me
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my

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, learning a foreign
language
at
such
an early age would be a burden for
children
.
Firstly
, it is indicated that
children
have a marvellous ability to learn linguistics. People can learn a
language
easily when they are young. Many older people often say that they are too old to learn a foreign
language
.
Children
do not think much about life and the world, so they can remember new
words
quickly by watching videos, cartoons, or looking at
the
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colourful books, pictures and real objects or joining some games. It is easy for
children
to imitate.
They
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The

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observer
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the other people and want to repeat
accurately
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them accurately

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.
Therefore
, when learning sounds, they can hear and
then
repeat
words
and sentences effectively. Another reason for early
language
study is that
children
have some characteristics that are suitable to learn foreign languages. They are curious and eager to learn interesting new things.
Besides
, because
of
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children
,
they
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apply

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are not shy and no fear of mistakes. They can repeat
words
many times without embarrassment, whereas
that is
impossible with
adult
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an adult

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.
This
helps
children
remember
words
easily.
Thirdly
, learning a foreign
language
from starting school, the young may dare to talk with foreigners and it's a very good chance to practice oral skills.
This
helps them have
good
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a good

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reflection in communication. They feel confident when speaking in a foreign
language
. According to some studies,
children
who learn a
second
or foreign
language
before
teenage
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their teenage

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years are more likely to achieve native-like pronunciation. In conclusion, many valuable books are written in some international languages
such
as English, students can get access to huge sources of learning. It is obvious that really necessary for
children
to learn a foreign
language
as soon as start school.
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