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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone? To what extent do you agree.

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #people #education
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Exorbitant
university
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fees
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 have deprived many talented
students
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 of their
education
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,
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 they wind up dropping from school. According to others, they agree that
university
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education
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 ought to be free. In my opinion, I believe that
education
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 at universities should be free
world wide
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worldwide
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 as
this
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 will bring more benefits for individuals and
society
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. One of the reasons to abolish the
fees
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 at universities is that it gives an equal opportunity for
students
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 regardless of their
back ground
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background
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.
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, low-income
students
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 can have a chance to pursue a degree at a prestigious
university
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 along with other rich
students
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.
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student
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 from low-income families with high intellectual ability can get an acceptance from Yale
University
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 without the need to pay for tuition
fees
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 that can open up many opportunities for them in the long run. Another reason to consider is that free
education
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 will give the
students
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 more time to focus on their studies and less time to work.
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, international
students
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 being away from their home country tend to work multiple jobs to afford the expensive school
fees
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, but with free
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education
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,education
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 the
students
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 can finish their degrees on time without the need to worry about the
fees
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.
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, free
education
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 can improve the status quo of
the
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society
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 from various aspects.
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, the well-being of a
society
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 highly depends on doctors and physicians and
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the
education
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 systems that encourage equality by providing free
education
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 can lead to having more graduates from medical schools and
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 maintaining a healthy
society
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. To sum up, expensive
university
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fees
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 can hinder the progress of the individual and
society
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 and
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 it is ought by countries around the world to make the
education
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 free for everyone as it will transform the
life
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lives
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 of so many people and enhance the situation of the societies.
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