Prison is the common way in most countries try to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people with a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays experts throughout both the developing and developed
world
have debated whether
prison
is the best way to decrease the number of offences or providing better
education
could solve the problem of
crime
in the modern
world
.
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essay will discuss both sides using examples from the latest research to demonstrate points and prove arguments.
Firstly
, developed countries with affordable
education
systems have less
criminal
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rate than
Third
World
countries, where
education
is poor and unnecessary. I could propose that the crucial reason
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this phenomena
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is that
education
gives us
possibility
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for work
,
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because it develops various skills and knowledge. Tus,
people
could earn money legally.
In addition
, schooling
instills
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ideas of good and evil.
Therefore
,
crime
could be predicted by providing
a
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better
education
. The
second
reason why I agree,
however
, is that
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nowadays the
world
has a huge amount of criminals,especially in disadvantaged countries. I am not a supporter of
prison
, but if they are released from
prison
,
then
there is a high probability that they will commit crimes again. Recent research of
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Psychological Association showed that
people
who
commited
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a
crime
once,
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have a higher probability to do it again, than
people
who never broke the law.
Therefore
,
prison
is a necessary measure for public safety. In conclusion, from the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that
education
could predict
crime
, having raised honest and respectable
people
, which is important, giving them knowledge and the ability to earn a living without breaking the laws.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tackles root causes
  • preventative approach
  • critical thinking
  • decision-making skills
  • recidivism rates
  • equipping
  • socio-economic benefits
  • underlying factors
  • poverty
  • ignorance
  • lack of opportunities
  • rehabilitation
  • ineffective
  • higher rates of re-offending
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