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Some languages spoken by very few people are losing their importance and may become bad extinct completely. Is it a good or bad development?

#languages #people #importance #development
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 more than a hundred languages are being spoken presently. While some of them are used by less number of persons,
hence
 dropping its significance and lead to vanish entirely. In
this
 essay, I will delve into it as negative progress.
To begin
 with, there are many drawbacks if a person stops speaking their native
language
.
One
 of the stumbling blocks is the loss of culture since
mother
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 tongue is crucial in everyone's traditions and people who belong to that can teach future generation only by creating awareness among them. So, it is
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 duty of every individual to pass their vernacular to their offsprings in order to save their customs.
In addition
 to that, a small group of folks may start to feel isolated because fewer persons speak that
language
.
Moreover
, there will be less diversification in the world.
Although
 with
one
 global
language
 communication will ease, nations would lose their own essence.
For example
, English is spoken by more than eighty-six countries, it does not mean that all the nations would forget their own
language
.
Therefore
,
one
language
 helps in many ways but
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language
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 prioritise in order to maintain
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 environment on the earth. To conclude, despite the pros of
one
language
, its cons cannot be neglected.
Also
, people should protect and promote their culture by saving their mother tongue.
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