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Task 2 In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#countries #people #newspapers #news #tv
In
this
 competitive era,
people
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for
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read
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 the
newspaper
. Most of the young generation avoid the papers they prefer the
news
 watching on Television. I will discuss the reason for
this
 problem and
also
 give some suggestions
how
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 we can tackle
this
 issue in the posterior paragraph. Admittedly, in numerous nations teenagers would like to prefer the visual so they follow the current affairs on television rather
then
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 read
newspaper
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. Due to
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there
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 hectic schedule children have no enough time to read the whole paragraph for getting the information so they can just watch it and
grap
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grab
grasp
 the knowledge about current affairs because watching
news
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 on tv is very less
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. If they read the newspapers
then
 they have to give full attention
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 the
news
.
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 they are
very
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 worst reader but some young ones are good listeners.
For instance
, York university
conduct
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 a survey which is about the
newsapaper
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newspaper
 and television 80%
young
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people
 likes
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watching
news
 because they said on
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 the
news
 they have enough choice to get the
news
 about
whole
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 world if
the
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 read the headline they only bring the knowledge about their local area and the city. On
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another
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 side, there are many
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 to resolve
this
 problem if the starting days of school teachers should motivate the children to read a daily
one
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article on magazine and
then
 discuss 7-8 min in class. It has very benefited to improve the reading skills of learners.
Secondly
, parents should discuss
the
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some important crimes, political
news
 with their young one so they should build their interest in
newspaper
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. Most of the
people
 avoid
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purchasing
newspaper
 or magazine they are
thing
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 it is
wastage
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 of money if everything in their phones so,
people
 should motivate their teenagers to read a magazine
atleast
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at least
 once a week.
For instance
, in one section of
newspaper
 especially design for young ones it about the puzzles, rhymes and other interesting things which
is
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 very helpful for their future. To
the
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conclude,
young
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the young
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 generation is
future
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 for every nation so everyone should motivate their teenagers to read the
newspaper
 and aware
about
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 the current affairs and current issues. Through the
newspaper
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 they should get enormous opportunities for their good career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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