Small businesses are disappearing and being replaced by large multinational companies. Do the advantage of this is outweigh the disadvantage ?

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Nowadays, Because of the big international
companies
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, local
businesses
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are being affected and at
some place
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someplace
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it is
extincting
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extinction
extinct
. I clearly state that
advantages
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the advantages
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outweigh the disadvantages.
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time government is more focusing on multinational
companies
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like arranging more n more summits and arranging conferences because it can be
very
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essential source of government income and
also
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citizen can get jobs because of it.
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, In the
last
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year survey, 30% citizen gets job and government earns 15% more money from taxes of international
companies
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. Whereas
,
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the
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benificial
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beneficial
of
multinational
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the multinational
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brand is, they are becoming
advance
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day by day and due to their
high level
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of technology
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technology
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people are becoming intelligent.
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, people are
prefering
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preferring
online shopping due to their online shopping facility which is not available in local
businesses
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.
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, it
also
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have
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disadvantages
at
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to
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some
extant
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. Owners of the local
businesses
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are
also
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focusing
for
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on
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advancement.
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, they are trying to provide their best in quality and service but they can not come close to multinational brands
thats
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that's
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this
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days
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local
businesses
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are going to downward. To
examplify
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exemplify
, They could not afford to provide service and manage stocks like multinational
companies
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. In the conclusions, multinational brands are much beneficial than the local
businesses
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for citizens because it can
provides
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more earning sources whereas the economy of local business
are
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is
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going
to
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downward.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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