It is importance for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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It is crucial that children should learn good and bad manners from childhood itself

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because they will practice in their

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what they learned from a younger age.In my point of ,view

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must be punished for bad attitudes in a non-violence way.

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are born knowing the rules and regulations of society,everything they learn from observation.

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are fast learners and good observers.If they grew up in a calm and quiet family it will reflect in their behaviour out of the house.

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may develop

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violent behaviour from an early age because they may be nurtured in an indecent family.

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,there are many parents addicted to alcoholism and they do misbehave in the house.

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violent behaviour would adapt by the

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and they would implement it in their future

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,teaching the best manners at an early

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is much easier than at a later age.If they do any bad attitudes, right after a parent or teacher can be solved by giving advice or teachers can explain the consequences

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happen belongs to that act. Discipline is

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important

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factor in scholars

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,it has to be taught from both home and school.

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must learn punctuality,reaching the school on time is part of discipline,in case the students fail to attend the class on time

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the teacher does have the full right to punish the student without any harm to the child.Hitting a child is an abusive way of punishment.Apart from physical harms,teachers or parents could give simple punishment

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as running the full ground or standing out of the classroom.These simple awards may change the children

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.They will understand what is wrong and correct. To conclude,building a productive child in the community is the responsibility of both parents and teachers.

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are learning everything from around them.To mould the excellent

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advice and punishments are necessary without harming them physically or mentally.If no punishment no discipline

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