Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that for
students
learning
art
in school will enhance their performance as well as improving their learning skill in different areas of
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class in schools. In
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this
statement. Despite the fact that there are many other important
subjects
such
as science, language and mathematics are crucial for
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career development in the future. It is equally important for
students
to learn
art
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beginning
at their younger age. By learning
art
,
students
will be educated to develop their original ideas as well as improve their creative thinkings and communication concepts. All these aspects will certainly
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beneficial
to
students
when learning and applying to other
subjects
.
For instance
, without the creativity and communication concept, very likely
students
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to memorize the knowledge from a science book or
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book.
As a result
, they cannot apply the knowledge to daily life.
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Moreover
,
students
who participate in an artwork project can learn to work as a team, communicate with others as well as expressing their own ideas with respects.
As a result
,
this
skillset will help them in learning other
subjects
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, which obviously
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positive effects for
students
able to bring in different ideas and increase their level of learning.
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,
art
can teach
students
about the country's history and cultural heritage,
students
can learn from the history and avoid making the same mistake. In conclusion, it is clear to see that there are many
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beneficial
impacts for
students
learning
art
in schools. In my opinion,
art
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Motor skills
  • Creativity
  • Perspectives
  • Emotional outlet
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global awareness
  • Historical art movements
  • Spatial intelligence
  • Curriculum overload
  • Non-competitive
  • Exposure
  • Cross-disciplinary benefits
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