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The most essential component of a person’s life is his or her time at the workplace, and life turns meaningless once no job satisfaction is obtained. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, there is a big focus on
job
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satisfaction
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. Some
people
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 believe that without it, their
life
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 would be meaningless. I completely disagree with
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 idea because
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job
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satisfaction
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 is important, I believe it is not the only thing that can bring meaning to a person’s
life
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. In fact, I believe there are many other things that can bring far greater meaning to a person’s
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 than their career choice.
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, being satisfied with your
job
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 is of some importance. Most
people
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 spend approximately 40 hours a week or more at work, and
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 it is important to have a
job
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 that brings the highest level of
satisfaction
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 to enrich our lives. Having a
job
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 that provides meaning to a person’s
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,
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 brings that person a sense of purpose and
fulfillment
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, which are two of the key ingredients for true happiness. Those who find themselves stuck in boring, monotonous, and menial jobs for years on end may end up developing a low sense of self-worth and suffer from some form of mental illness,
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 as depression or anxiety.
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,
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 not to say that without career
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 you cannot have a meaningful
life
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. These days, many
people
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 do not have the luxury of being able to choose the career of their choice as they may not have had the opportunity to pursue it, due to lack of education or money. These
people
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 can still find meaning in other parts of their
life
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, whether it be in raising their children and taking care of their family
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 or even pursuing their passions and hobbies outside of work hours.
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, someone may find the most meaning in their
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 by creating art, but may not be able to make a living by doing
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 and
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 have to get a
job
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 that may not bring them much
satisfaction
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. In conclusion, there are several other aspects of
people
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’s lives where meaning can be found, be it children, hobbies, or even religion.
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 not to say that
job
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satisfaction
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 is not important, but rather just one possible source of happiness out of many.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • component
  • workplace
  • job satisfaction
  • meaningless
  • extent
  • agree
  • disagree
  • significant
  • crucial
  • purposeless
  • factors
  • contribute
  • balancing
  • personal life
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