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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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countries
people
 prefer to live alone rather than living with the family . In order to live a peaceful and simple life. I believe living alone is total up to an individual choice
although
 there is no harm in sharing your own space. On one hand,
People
 who live alone have to take care of all the expenses and all the important decisions in their life . Some times it can
also
 lead to damage to your mental health. For
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instant , As per the American statistic ratio over 75% of the American population is suffering from depression, anxiety, and other mental issues . The cause of all these is due to being lonely makes
people
 empty and leads them to practice suicide attempts
On the other hand
, leaving with a surrounding
that is
 your family or friends can be totally opposite of what
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 said above . As per the
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research it has been proven that
people
 who live with their family or a happy surrounding are much likely to be stress-free than individuals living alone . To illustrate , If you are living with your family or with a person with your attached , it is very much easier to share your thoughts opinion and if they guide you to the correct path you accept it without any hesitation.
This
 happens because the trust which is between two
people
 In conclusion, I firmly believe that leaving alone can create damaging effects on individuals in society , which can lead to dangerous activities
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