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In many countries, people like to eat a wider variety of food than can be grown in their local area. As a result, much of the food people eat today has to come from other regions. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Momentarily, the urge of experimenting with eatables by humans has ignited the emergence of new cuisines globally;
consequently
, foreign
food
 items are becoming more consumable
besides
 the local
food
.
This
 depicts myriad benefits including employment generation, familiarization of different
food
 cultures as compared to few drawbacks
such
 as a threat to the extinction of local specialities. Multiple meals are appearing to be a blessing to many job seekers.
This
 means that as the knowledge and availability of international edibles have escalated, so has its demand. Because of
this
, universally, new vacancies of chefs has been hiked.
Consequently
, employment growth is being optimized at its peak.
For instance
, India has welcomed recipes from every nook and corner which is being taught and trained to the pupils; for making them financially independent.
Hence
, a variety of
food
 items assist in the multiplication of job opportunities through its demand.
Furthermore
, convenience
food
 from different cultures, regions are being adapted by native as well as non-native citizens. Due to
this
 ,adaptation distinct
food
 items are being explored by many consumers.
As a result
 of
this
, familiarization among numerous cultural
food
 has increased.
for example
, the introduction of cuisine
such
 as dumplings has made public investigating more in Chinese
food
 categories.
Thus
, promotion and acknowledgement of one culture can be achieved y its
food
 specialities. Despite the certain advantages of international
food
 , the infusion of international recipes in local
food
 class has drastically impacted the importance of community
food
.
This
 is because mankind gets attracted easily towards the alien
food
 which makes them ignorant to Theobald
food
. So the threat of extinction of several Forte is upsurging in recent times. In conclusion,
although
, the mingling of numerous
food
 uniqueness has caused the risk of endangering local recipes, it has firmly benefited humans by way of employment opportunities
besides
 popularizing various cultures and regions.
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