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It is impossible to help all people in the world so governments should only focus on people in their own countries To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Globalization has brought economies close to each other.
Although
 many people say that authorities should look after only those persons who live inside their boundary lines since access to all the human beings is not possible. In
this
 essay, I will discuss why I disagree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, the government is liable to protect its citizens irrespective of their territory they are living in.
First
 of all, it the duty of the legislative to safeguard its people from injustice even if they are living abroad.
For instance
, in coronavirus pandemic many Indians were struck in other nations,
then
 the government of India airlifted its folks to save them from
this
 deadly virus. So, government officials must take adequate measures to protect its nationalists regardless of their location.
In addition
 to that, developed countries
such
 as the United State of America and the United Kingdom can lend a helping hand to underprivileged nations to raise their economies positively by providing grants as with the advent of technology nothing seems impossible.
Nevertheless
, one reason authorities only develop their own country is that it can give services more quickly and earn fame for themselves. Since
this
 can lead an economy to selfishness and materialism as well. To conclude, despite easy access only in the home country, executives should protect the rights of their nationalists in other countries
also
 because in today’s time technology is present which can help anyone in no time. In my opinion,
also
 the well-being of all human beings should be given more priority.
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