Do you agree that the advantages cars bring outweigh the disadvantages?

Automobiles are becoming more and more popular these days to the point that it is becoming a necessity for some families to own at least one
if not more. I do believe its benefits overcome its drawbacks.
essay will examine my view in more details. It is undeniable that having millions of vehicles on the road every day can impact the quality of the air we breath and the environment we live
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a negative way. Air pollution in some area of the world
for instance
has caused so many health conditions including lung cancer.
, in some area of the world, it is very difficult to commute without a vehicle due to the fact that people live far away from where they work.
For instance
, in the united
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some people live a hundred miles away from their workplace, if they want to use public transport, it will take hours for them to commute, which is not practical.
, it makes it impossible to make a trip without a
, kids go to school and parents have to
go to so many different destinations per day that makes it even more difficult. Another advantage of having a
is to be able to travel long distance with family. Whereas, without ,
it is very expensive and time consuming to travel around.
For instance
, a simple road trip to Whistler from downtown Vancouver for a family of four by the bus is about $280, while with your own automobile it cost less than $30.
, you have the flexibility of having numerous stops along the way which is not an option when you don't drive your
. To sum up, even though, some might argue with me saying that cars can pollute the air and cause lots of human illnesses, it seems to me that
is a necessity for many families who travel a lot and for those who need it in order to be able to go from and to work. In order to reduce its negative impact on the environment, one should only use his
for essential travels.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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