Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that there should be some harsh rules for those
people
who break the laws in order to control the traffic congestions on the roads.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that some productive steps should be taken to improve the rush and safety of the
people
. In my opinion. proper awareness among the individuals of the nation and technology should be used to detect who break the rule and regulations. The viable steps should be taken to give the knowledge among the general public of the country so that they can easily understand the laws of the country
furthermore
, without
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they can put there and others
people
life at risk.
Besides
this
, proper training for the particular time period should be required
therefore
drive should
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confident while driving.
For instance
, in
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Australia
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Australian
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,Australian
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it is
a
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mandatory to take
driver
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a driver
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general knowledge test and some driving experience which is recorded on the record book provided by the government and after that legal license is assigned to the individuals.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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