TOPIC: People today spend less and less time interacting with other people in the neighbourhood and this has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solution to this problem

TOPIC:
People
today spend less and less time interacting with other
people
in the neighbourhood and
this
has a negative impact on communities. What are the possible causes and solution to
this
problem
.
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It is vital to establish rapport
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people
around us,
however
,
that is
not the case nowadays. Social interaction is getting lesser and lesser each day which will eventually create
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in the near future if communities do not see
such
importance. In
this
essay, I would like to highlight some possible reasons and solutions to
this
dilemma. One negative impact of modern technology is
people
getting glued
into
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devices
such
as their computers and mobile phones at home. They become reliant to these gadgets because it provides them convenience and comfort in their daily lives.
For example
, it is very easy to order food
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one’s favourite restaurant through the internet and having it delivered to their doorsteps.
As a result
, social contact is diminished in
this
kind of process.
Moreover
, with the increasing demands of society, some
people
are left with no choice but to work all day long, sometimes taking 2 or 3 jobs just to make ends meet. Piling water and electricity bills, house mortgages or car loans are some responsibilities
people
need to face in order to continue with life.
Consequently
, with
this
routine, there is no time to mingle with others especially with neighbours.
Thirdly
,
people
fear to go out of their dwellings due to the stigma they may face in the community. The recent “Asian hate crimes” happening around is a very specific example of why
people
want to isolate
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their homes
instead
of interacting with other
people
. There
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maybe
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no ultimate solution to the reasons stated above,
however
, giving importance to social interaction creates a meaningful result
specially
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in the community.
For example
, a simple gesture of inviting neighbours for a good meal or a drink promotes camaraderie and lessens awkwardness.
On the other hand
, while we really need our jobs for a living, mingling with
people
around us helps in regaining energy from the hustles and bustles of life. When communities are not socially active and engaged, satisfaction is not present and progress is hampered.
On the other hand
, when
people
interact with one another, it fosters openness which will
subsequently
lead to a better and liveable community.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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