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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 era of modernization and
globalization
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 there are a lot of
opportunities
 available in developed
countries
 like the USA and Canada. Today, smart
people
 are migrating from poor
nations
 to richer
countries
 to work in the field of engineering and medicine. Some
people
 think richer
countries
 are stealing the human capital of poor
countries
 whereas others think it is just a migration of workers to developed
countries
. I totally disagree with the argument that richer
countries
 are robbing poor
countries
 of their human resources. Nobody is asking
people
 to migrate. The most important reason for
people
 migrating to other
countries
 is that there are more
opportunities
 available. The developed
nations
 have more infrastructure available for research and development which some of the poor
nations
 do not have.
For example
, around 100,000
people
 from South Asian
countries
 migrate to the USA and Germany for better education and job prospects. After graduating in some years, students can find jobs which provide them more satisfaction and a good salary.
Furthermore
, the education system in the richer
countries
 is advanced in the field of engineering and medicine. There are more options available to work and learn at the same time. By working in some of the multi-national companies, migrants get encouraged to work hard and are able to fulfil their ambitions. They are able to provide a better lifestyle and education to their families which are
also
 one of the most crucial reasons for migration.
On the other hand
, the argument that rich
nations
 are stealing talent does not hold water.
People
 are moving on their own. Since the dawn of civilization, mankind has always shown an interest in moving to greener pastures. If developing
nations
 are able to provide similar
opportunities
 in their country, many of these
people
 who moved to foreign
countries
 will be more than happy to return. So, it is basically a question of
people
 moving to places where better
opportunities
 are available. While I do admit that
this
 leads to brain drain, we cannot blame the rich
nations
 for
this
. To conclude, due to the availability of more resources and
opportunities
 in the field of computing, engineering and medicine more
people
 are migrating to developed
countries
 to fulfil their dreams and ambitions. In my opinion,
this
 is a natural movement of skilled workforce and rich
countries
 cannot be blamed for abetting
this
.
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