In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

Tuition

fees

for tertiary

education

is

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so expensive that many students struggle to raise

it

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them

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. Some people believe that university

education

should not be charged. I completely agree with

this

statement mainly because it brings equality among learners and

secondly

they can focus on learning only.

To begin

with,

noone

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no one

none

will fail to attend college because of

lack

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a lack

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of resources.

In other words

, everyone has an opportunity to attend tertiary

education

whether he\ she is poor or rich.

This

gives equal chances to anyone who has good grades ,despite their personal background. Large sums of tuition

fees

deter less

priviledged

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privileged

individuals

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right to obtain a degree because they cannot afford it.

For example

., my cousin failed to attend university

education

because his parents could not pay for him,

eventhough

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even though

he passed high school with flying colours.

Hence

, removing payments allows

such

people to achieve their dreams.

Furthermore

, students will focus on their studies more.

This

is because

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they will not have to work to provide for themselves and even to pay their debts. When parents spent all their money paying for yo tuition

fees

that means they will not have enough money to cater for other needs,

therefore

a lot of college students will end up working.

For instance

, during my university studies, I worked

night

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shift at a coffee shop ,

consquently

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consequently

, I was always tired and

this

affected my grades badly. So, if learners stop working they will have good results and become

well informed

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employees. To conclude, exorbitant college

fees

cripples

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a number of disadvantaged members of society who will fail to attend or have to do some piece jobs while they are learning. I strongly agree that tertiary

education

should be free of charge as everyone will be able to acquire a degree and better results will be

procuded

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produced

.