In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree?

Tuition
fees
for tertiary
education
is
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so expensive that many students struggle to raise
it
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them
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. Some people believe that university
education
should not be charged. I completely agree with
this
statement mainly because it brings equality among learners and
secondly
they can focus on learning only.
To begin
with,
noone
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no one
none
will fail to attend college because of
lack
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of resources.
In other words
, everyone has an opportunity to attend tertiary
education
whether he\ she is poor or rich.
This
gives equal chances to anyone who has good grades ,despite their personal background. Large sums of tuition
fees
deter less
priviledged
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privileged
individuals
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right to obtain a degree because they cannot afford it.
For example
., my cousin failed to attend university
education
because his parents could not pay for him,
eventhough
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even though
he passed high school with flying colours.
Hence
, removing payments allows
such
people to achieve their dreams.
Furthermore
, students will focus on their studies more.
This
is because
,
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they will not have to work to provide for themselves and even to pay their debts. When parents spent all their money paying for yo tuition
fees
that means they will not have enough money to cater for other needs,
therefore
a lot of college students will end up working.
For instance
, during my university studies, I worked
night
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shift at a coffee shop ,
consquently
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consequently
, I was always tired and
this
affected my grades badly. So, if learners stop working they will have good results and become
well informed
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employees. To conclude, exorbitant college
fees
cripples
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a number of disadvantaged members of society who will fail to attend or have to do some piece jobs while they are learning. I strongly agree that tertiary
education
should be free of charge as everyone will be able to acquire a degree and better results will be
procuded
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produced
.
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