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Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge impact on both individuals and society. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Since the dawn of the internet, social media has become pervasive across the world.
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, it is argued that its
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 had a profound impact on not only
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 the communities in the world. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 the communication barrier amongst the citizens as well as helped them improve their education and knowledge.
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social networking websites has enabled human beings and
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societies to communicate with
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 living overseas .
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, netizens can easily converse with one another for longer hours without any interruption or additional charges though network connectivity has to be strong.
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, an individual can use different features of social applications,
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 as internet-calling and video-conferencing to verbally converse with either relatives or colleagues at an economical cost.
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, if there weren't
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people
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 and other groups to connect with long-distance family members or colleagues.
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, these sites are of paramount importance for everyone throughout the world.
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, it is helping each and every country produce more number of literates with impressive intellects.
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 not only help connect known
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 together but
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is immensely helpful for an individual to find a new tutor, who teaches the students from the comfort of their homes. In fact, in developed countries, like
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, pupils prefer studying online as the professors teach them using 3-D videos and pictures which gives them in-depth knowledge of the subject
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 of using the traditional method for teaching particularly on
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.
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,
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 it helps students consolidate their implicit knowledge, it gives them practical exposure to the subject as well. In conclusion, even though some argue that social media has an immense effect on an individual, families and societies, I believe it has a positive impact as it is helping
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 to be close to each other via web-calling and
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 helping the nation develop more number of inquisitive students.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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