Some believe that advances in technology are increasing the gap between rich and poor while others think the opposite is happening. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Many people claim that technological progress helps on the issue of economic inequality, while others believe that it
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dealing with it. I am going to discuss the arguments of both sides and express my opinion on the matter.
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, I believe it is crucial to underline that the advances in
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are actually making the operation of small businesses easier and more profitable especially in the category of online
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e-delivery online platform, an
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to gain more customers and reputation.
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, nowadays it is easier and more accessible to find a new job by using the vast
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of websites created just for that
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, to connect employers with potential employees with minimal effort.
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nowadays contains a humongous
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of information, recorded lectures, courses and tutorials without requiring any payment,
as a result
, someone who is interested and motivated enough can learn a skill that could be profitable to him in the future, so technological progress creates
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for everyone. On the other side of the spectrum, there are people who insist that technological progress is more beneficial for those that are already rich rather than the ones that are not.
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since technological advancements
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in making the production costs of colossal corporations cheaper.
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, production costs decrease. In conclusion, I believe that the
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development of technology benefits both the rich and the poor,
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of possibilities and
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the poor have to be successful, something exceptionally beneficial on the fight against economic inequality.
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