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Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do u agree or disagree.

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As modern technology takes its toll in the 21st century, social
media
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 is making its waves globally. Different networking sites
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 as Facebook, YouTube or Instagram provided significance to different
people
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's lives. I opine that
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 issue is true and agree fully
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 how social
media
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 has had impacted us. To commence with, some
people
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 make social
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as
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their source of living.
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, an individual or a group creates videos and upload
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in
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to
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 YouTube, and the more views they get from
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 content, the more they are paid by YouTube. It is a
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 situation for the uploaded gaining money from his or her videos and for the viewer getting entertained from watching
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. With
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, the internet has helped create new jobs
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 others.
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, the youths are the most vulnerable to
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 movement. Education has become more convenient with the help of different networking sites. Students can easily share information from group works or
assignements
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assignments
. Teachers,
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hand
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 find it easy to keep their students updated with class and exam schedules.
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, their reliance
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this
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 way of learning could expose them to negative elements if not done properly.
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, social
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 has helped
people
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 stay in contact with their friends and loved ones from far places,
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 making it an excellent purpose for communication. As impressive as it sounds, social
media
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 has its side effects too. Some
people
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 portray unreal or fake identities just to get more likes and positive comments. They post false information to mislead others and create confusion. More so,
cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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 has been rampant nowadays causing mental and
emotionsk
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emotions
emotion
 health issues. In conclusion, while social networking sites are sources of information and communication, it has
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 impact on
people
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's lives. The bottom line is, when we use it moderately, social medics will not control our lives and
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 help us balance it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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