Some environmentalists have advocated building wildlife sanctuaries to protect endangered species . Discuss both views and give your opinion ?

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of transformation of the world
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led the deforestation. some ecologist
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believed that
wildlife
santuaries
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sanctuaries

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should be established to prevent the extinction of
wildlife
species
.
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discuss

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the
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some positive aspects of
this
idea and what could be done to protect them in the
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half and some
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fact in
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section. On the one hand,there are many
species
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disappearing
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from the planet and
wildlife
.
Santuaries
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will help to protect them. To
further
explain,we can keep some
of
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animals and birds in the
wildlife
park
and let them breed.
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, animals could raise their population in
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safe place.
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, some Himalayan Hangul Dear were kept in the wild
park
after some years there were a prolific number of dear have raised. In
this
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we can
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our endangered
species
and can
also
protect our mother nature.
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, there are some devastating
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can
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be seen for the establishment of
wildlife
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park
as animals are habituated with their own
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. To elaborate, they could face a hormonal imbalance and could not adjust themselves in those
santuaries
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area for various reasons.
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, some white Tiger were kept in the Dachigham
wildlife
park
but they could not survive for the weather.Most of them have died.
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conclusion,
wild life
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wildlife

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park
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so many advantages but there have some negative aspects too. So government should take some necessary steps to protect our endangered animal and ensured their proper
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. In thats
way
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we can
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our
species
and prevent their extinction.
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