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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
Nowadays, we can see the digital world has revolutionized
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society. Many higher educational institutes offer online courses which
students
 can study via
internet
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. In my opinion, I believe
this
 trend definitely comes with many beneficial impacts.
To begin
 with, many online courses offering flexible class schedule which is ideal for
students
 who need to work and support their financial needs.
For instance
, it allows
student
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 who currently working with a
fulltime
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 job or
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 job an opportunity to develop their professional education without having to worry about paying their bills.
Furthermore
, some mature
students
 who missed their higher education at their younger age due to different reasons
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 now getting a
second
 chance to fulfil their dreams of learning the desired subject and keeping their career achievement, which they had built for years.
In addition
,
students
 who are studying through
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 can choose to study
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anywhere without geographic limitation. They can study at their own pace as well as taking breaks from the course to suit their personal needs. For course learners who able to dedicate more time to their studies, they may
also
 speed up their learning to complete a course sooner.
Moreover
, shifting the class from physical classroom to digital platform
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 the expense of education institution.
Therefore
 the management of institution can allocate more resources to improve the quality of teaching and learning material for their
students
. To conclude, despite the fact that
students
 may not be able to have face to face interaction with other
students
 and their professor like how they used to in a traditional classroom. We can clearly see there are many more advantages from the development of online courses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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