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TO BE COMPETITIVE IN SCHOOL. OTHERS HOWEVER SAY THAT CORPORATION AND TEAMWORKING SKILLS ARE MORE IMPORTANT. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS.

#school #corporation #skills
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Education is one of the most important in our daily life and there are various ways to get it properly. Some people believe that learning at
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 with their
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 is better than self-study at home. In my opinion, studying with
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 will help them utilise their performance and
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 to develop their talents
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children
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 learn at
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 rather than at home. The
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 advantage of studying at
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 is about the environment surrounding them. To illustrate,
children
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 are able to communicate with
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 and their friends more
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 and develop social skills.
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, they can learn from each
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 and solve problems faster than self-study
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, while learning at home will lack
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interaction and can lead to social issues later on. The
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 advantage is
teachers
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 can detect talents from
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 and have better aims for them compared with parents.
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, instructors usually interact with
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 of pupils and they are experienced from teaching them, so they can understand deeply how well the child is and lead them to the right path.
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,
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also
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 spend more time
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 with them than parents nowadays.
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,
children
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 can share their thoughts and
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 with their instructors naturally. In conclusion, learning at
school
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 can have some disadvantages
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 as copycat from inappropriate actions from their friends, being
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 of violence.
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, the benefits of studying in an institution are outweigh compared with self-study.
Children
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 are able to be fully developed their talents as well as communication skills which is essential and most important in our daily life.
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