You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job.In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir, I am writing to ask for an impotent marketing
course
.Recently,
i
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I

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had a meeting with my friends and as we were walking
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past

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pass
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past

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the billboard I have seen
an
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apply

The indefinite article, an, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun advertising in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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advertising
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advertisement

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about useful marketing courses near to our office centre.
Firstly
,
this
is 3 months training
course
with additional meetings with famous business-mans who worked a lot in
selling
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the selling

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area, in
this
particular
course
you can find a
lot
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oflot

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benefits,
such
as information about
market
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the market

The noun phrase market strategy seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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strategy of popular and successful companies.
Moreover
, they offer amazing Ukrainian and Poland language courses.
Also
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,Also

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their
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there

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is a lot of interacting games
such
as brainstorming.
It
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I

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would be grateful if you will buy
this
3
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months

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moths
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months

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course
for our team
,
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apply

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because it should help us to improve our skills and ability to work better and make decisions faster.As we are
international
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an international

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company

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compony
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company

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and my team always works with
aboard
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abroad

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companies
is
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it

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will be great to know an additional language. If you require any
further
information, please don’t hesitate and contact me. Beat regards, Yuriy Kornienko

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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